alpacinou
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Hello.
I'm trying to describe a stroke/heart attack in a dramatic way.
Is this good?
He moaned in agony. Then the pain shooting up and down his body gave way to a silent panic. His jaw fell. His face turned red. A pale crept into his skin and spread. His hands started shaking and his arms twitching. There was forth on his lips. John collapsed.
I'm trying to describe a stroke/heart attack in a dramatic way.
Is this good?
He moaned in agony. Then the pain shooting up and down his body gave way to a silent panic. His jaw fell. His face turned red. A pale crept into his skin and spread. His hands started shaking and his arms twitching. There was forth on his lips. John collapsed.