my hobby

[zarii143]

my name is zahra askary. I'm 17 years old. i live in holland. i'm in a highschool. i have alot of hobby's. i would like to do everything in my free times. but unfortunetly i dont have a lot of time to spent for my hobby's. i am always busy with studying. i have got alot of exams. but i do some nice hobby at weekend. like photogarphy, sport, dance, waching movie etc.. i feel so bad i can't write very wel english.. i cant make right sentences. i use short and not nice. if you do this correct for me .. i will be so happy..Thanks alot

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

My name is Zahra Askary. I'm 17 years old. I live in Holland. I'm in high school. I have a lot of hobbies. I would like to do everything in my free time, but unfortunately I don't have a lot of time to spend on my hobbies. I am always busy studying. I have a lot of exams, but I do some good hobby work on weekends, like photography, sports, dancing, and watching movies. I feel bad that I can't write very English very well. I can't make correct sentences. I use short sentences that are not very good. If you correct this for me I will be so happy. Thanks a lot.

Hi, Zahra!

1. If you don't use capitals, a lot of the teachers here won't respond, because they'll think you're not serious.

2. A lot is two words.

3. End sentences with one period, not two.

4. When we pluralize words that end consonant-Y, like hobby, we usually end it with -ies: hobbies. If the word ends with vowel-Y, we just add an S: monkeys, Fridays, boys. I don't know why.

5. There is nothing wrong with short sentences! Get good at short sentences first, then learn to make long sentences.

How long have you been studying English? I think you're doing well.

 

[emsr2d2]

When are you going to submit this short essay to your teacher?

 

[tedmc]

I have a lot of exams, but I do some good hobby work on weekends, like photography, sports, dancing, and watching movies.

Original sentence: I do some nice hobby...

"Do some good hobby work" - can we say that? It sounds a bit strange to me. Dancing and movies can hardly be called "work".
I prefer: I am engaged/spend time in hobbies like... or I enjoy being engaged/spending time in hobbies like...

not a teacher

 

[emsr2d2]

It doesn't work for me.