Dream Journal: Nobody tapped me to wake up

[englishlovesick]

The below sentence is the opening of my recently published blog. I have uncertainties on how to place commas and full stop in a sentence. I'd also need general corrections on the sentence. Thank you.

"Nobody tapped me to wake up right after the minute I noticed that the chalice firmly held in my hands almost got blown away by a powerful wind emerging from the top of the building where the burnt sacrifice or offering was hosted".

 

[emsr2d2]

The below sentence below is the opening of my recently published blog. I have uncertainties on how to place I'm not sure about the placement of commas and full stops. in a sentence. I'd I also need general corrections on to/of the sentence. Thank you.

Please note my changes above. Before we consider commenting on your main text, please confirm that your member profile is correct. Your piece doesn't read as if it was written by someone who grew up speaking American English. It's very unusual for someone who was born in and grew up in Nigeria, and still lives there, to have American English as their native language.