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Peeping? Peeking?
I think using the past simple makes it sound as if it popped up, had a look round and went away again. I'd use the continuous.
The moon was peeping out from behind ...
The rising moon shone over the peak.
The rising moon shone over the peak.
"... the clouds of the star-studded sky" sounds odd. For a sky to be star-studded, I'd expect it to be a clear night (no clouds). Admittedly, the majority of the sky in your photo is star-studded and there are some wispy clouds above the mountains.
"... the clouds of the star-studded sky" sounds odd. For a sky to be star-studded, I'd expect it to be a clear night (no clouds). Admittedly, the majority of the sky in your photo is star-studded and there are some wispy clouds above the mountains.
If I could find my penalty buzzer, it'd be blasting now. Fifteen yards for adjective abuse!Does this work?
The half-moon was peeping through a chink in the clouds of the star-studded sky and shone over the snow-clad peak.
I know it's awkward. I want to make it smooth.
If I could find my penalty buzzer, it'd be blasting now. Fifteen yards for adjective abuse!
Definitely don't use "the clouds of the sky". Where else would the clouds be?!
Much better, but now there's an inconsistency in the tenses of the verbs I've underlined.How would you say it? Is this better?
The half-moon was peeping through a chink in the clouds and shone over the peak.
Much better, but now there's an inconsistency in the tenses of the verbs I've underlined.
I see. What if I use "peek" in the second part of the sentence?
Is "half-moon" okay, by the way?
The half-moon was peeping through a chink in the clouds and was peeking from behind the peak.
[STRIKE]Describe[/STRIKE] Describing the relationship between the moon, [STRIKE]and[/STRIKE] the clouds and the mountain peak is very difficult for me right now.
Note my corrections above.
I really don't think you need to try and use two verbs for one thing. Also, unless you did it on purpose, using "peek(ing)" and "peak" so close together sounds a bit odd. How about this?
The half-moon was peeping through a chink in the clouds, just over the mountain peak.
Thanks. That is great. Could I use "barely" instead of just?
The half-moon was peeping through a chink in the clouds, barely over the mountain peak.
Is there a way I can fit "stars" and "the sky" in here?
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