lucakun
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- Oct 5, 2011
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- Italian
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- Italy
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- Italy
Hi guys! Here I am with a new writing test.
Would you please revise it?
here is the exam task:
Your English teacher has asked you to write a short story for the school magazine.
The story must begin with the following words.
When I look back on it now, I realise it was the most exciting day of my life.
When I look back on it now, I realise it was the most exciting day of my life.
It all began one morning five years ago, while I was eating my breakfast at home, suddendly the telephone rang. It was a classmate of mine who wanted to ask me if we had gone trekking together to the mountains.
Since it was such a wonderful day, sunny and warm, I immediately accepted his offer. Therefore I dressed, prepared my rucksack and I walked toward our meeting place.
As I had arrived, we set off straight away along the path.
My friend Eric seemed really happy. '' We should do that more often! ''
He said cheerfully. After some hours of walking, suddendly we found ourselves facing a huge wild boar. The animal was right in the middle of the path and it was snarling at us out of sorts. Actually looking back, my friend was so frightened of it, who he could not even have a word! '' I must think quickly to a solution '', I thought to myself, because the situation was getting dangerous.
So with some courage, I decided to run away and climb up the first tree I had seen, with my friend behind me. Meanwhile, despite the wild boar had run toward us, it didn't succeed in taking us.
Fortunately after some minutes, the animal back in the woods and we handled to come down from the tree and get back home safe and sound.
Now I realise, it was really an amazing day.
Would you please revise it?
here is the exam task:
Your English teacher has asked you to write a short story for the school magazine.
The story must begin with the following words.
When I look back on it now, I realise it was the most exciting day of my life.
When I look back on it now, I realise it was the most exciting day of my life.
It all began one morning five years ago, while I was eating my breakfast at home, suddendly the telephone rang. It was a classmate of mine who wanted to ask me if we had gone trekking together to the mountains.
Since it was such a wonderful day, sunny and warm, I immediately accepted his offer. Therefore I dressed, prepared my rucksack and I walked toward our meeting place.
As I had arrived, we set off straight away along the path.
My friend Eric seemed really happy. '' We should do that more often! ''
He said cheerfully. After some hours of walking, suddendly we found ourselves facing a huge wild boar. The animal was right in the middle of the path and it was snarling at us out of sorts. Actually looking back, my friend was so frightened of it, who he could not even have a word! '' I must think quickly to a solution '', I thought to myself, because the situation was getting dangerous.
So with some courage, I decided to run away and climb up the first tree I had seen, with my friend behind me. Meanwhile, despite the wild boar had run toward us, it didn't succeed in taking us.
Fortunately after some minutes, the animal back in the woods and we handled to come down from the tree and get back home safe and sound.
Now I realise, it was really an amazing day.