Would this sentence be correct in grammar?

[Mehrgan]

I know the idea in the sentence sounds pretty weird, but I was wondering if it can be used in writings.


Years of experiencing the hardships of life in the poor social conditions can lead to many parents’ encouraging their children to study abroad.



If the sentence is correct, then is there any way I can nominalise the underlined section, please?

 

[MikeNewYork]

Your sentence is understandable. What do you think is wrong?

 

[BobK]

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Years of experiencing the hardships of life in the poor social conditions can lead to many parents’ encouraging their children to study abroad.



If the sentence is correct, then is there any way I can nominalise the underlined section, please?

If you've named the place and detailed the nature of the conditons you can say 'life in the poor social conditions'. But if you're just saying in general that parents with a hard life encourage infantile international study (there's your nominalization, but why bother? ), you should delete 'the'.

Otherwise, as Mike said, it's OK as-is.

b

 

[Masood_S]

Not a teacher.

Suggested minor corrections:
Years of experiencing the hardships of life in [STRIKE]the [/STRIKE]poor social conditions can lead to many parents encouraging their children to study abroad.

 

[Tarheel]

Of course, your sentence will not be by itself. It will have company. You will need to know how well it will fit in with the rest of your essay.

 

[Rover_KE]

Masood_S, please state that you are not a teacher, in accordance with forum rules.

 

[Rover_KE]

Mehrgan, a better title would have been encouraging their children to study abroad.

 

[emsr2d2]

Rover is quite right that a good title includes some or all of the words you are querying. However, it is worth noting that "grammatically correct" is a much better phrase than "correct in grammar".

 

[Mehrgan]

Your sentence is understandable. What do you think is wrong?

I just had the feeling I was using it unnaturally. The problem is, would you give it an ok if you saw it in an IELTS essay?!

 

[Mehrgan]

If you've named the place and detailed the nature of the conditions you can say 'life in the poor social conditions'. But if you're just saying in general that parents with a hard life encourage infantile international study (there's your nominalization, but why bother? ), you should delete 'the'.

Otherwise, as Mike said, it's OK as-is.

b

Thanks. Indeed, I meant 'such very bad conditions' are exactly the same conditions those children will be brought up in, so I thought I'd better use 'the' as it was referring to something I meant later in the same sentence. But, I've taken your point.