rodgers white
Senior Member
- Joined
- Jan 17, 2016
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- English Teacher
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- Chinese
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- China
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- China
Hi there. Would you please proofread the following text? Any help would be appreciated.
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Penny looked about the lab trying to think of something useful, or at least inspirational. Her father had called her his muse since she was very young. Then her eyes rested on the other device, and her expression went blank as her imagination engulfed her.
Dylan recognised that expression, he had seen it many times before, and he dared a little hope. Then Penny’s eyes blinked moisture back into themselves, and Dylan said, “OK honey, what is it?”
Penny took a few more seconds, then. “Firstly, is that other ring-thing a spare or just broken?” Dylan said,“A spare, why?”
“Well.” Penny said, pointing to the operational ring. “If you could consider that ring the front door, it makes me think of this one as the back door. Maybe if you find a way to connect them, it can keep the wormhole from collapsing”.
Dylan got up and started pacing the floor, then pulled his daughter from her chair and hugged her. “Always, every time I find myself stuck and think I can’t continue, you come to my rescue. That’s brilliant, Penny, brilliant. Let’s take a break, we can start again tomorrow.”
Penny said, “We, you really, want me to help?”
Dylan replied, “I always wanted you to help, but I was afraid I’d disintegrate you or something when you were younger. Now, now you’re old enough?”
Penny laughed. “Old enough, to be disintegrated?”
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Penny looked about the lab trying to think of something useful, or at least inspirational. Her father had called her his muse since she was very young. Then her eyes rested on the other device, and her expression went blank as her imagination engulfed her.
Dylan recognised that expression, he had seen it many times before, and he dared a little hope. Then Penny’s eyes blinked moisture back into themselves, and Dylan said, “OK honey, what is it?”
Penny took a few more seconds, then. “Firstly, is that other ring-thing a spare or just broken?” Dylan said,“A spare, why?”
“Well.” Penny said, pointing to the operational ring. “If you could consider that ring the front door, it makes me think of this one as the back door. Maybe if you find a way to connect them, it can keep the wormhole from collapsing”.
Dylan got up and started pacing the floor, then pulled his daughter from her chair and hugged her. “Always, every time I find myself stuck and think I can’t continue, you come to my rescue. That’s brilliant, Penny, brilliant. Let’s take a break, we can start again tomorrow.”
Penny said, “We, you really, want me to help?”
Dylan replied, “I always wanted you to help, but I was afraid I’d disintegrate you or something when you were younger. Now, now you’re old enough?”
Penny laughed. “Old enough, to be disintegrated?”