[Grammar] With awareness

[topman85]

With awareness, not only the great energy of this group is not wasted due to shyness, resentment, anxiety, fear of the crowd, and other things, but also by directing this great source of energy towards creativity, writing, lecturing, art, and other valuable works all use these positive features.



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[tedmc]

No, the sentence is too long and is trying to say too many things. What follows after "but also" is not related to the earlier part and does not make sense.

 

[emsr2d2]

With awareness, not only the great energy of this group is not wasted due to shyness, resentment, anxiety, fear of the crowd, and other things, but also by directing this great source of energy towards creativity, writing, lecturing, art, and other valuable works all use these positive features.

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Note my correction and comment above.

I have no idea what your long, convoluted sentence means. Please try to explain it to us differently and more clearly.