When light from sky passes through something

[alpacinou]

I want to describe a situation when the light from sky passes through something.

Are these correct and natural?

1. The gray of the clouds seeped through the drapes, casting the room in a dreary, diffused glow.

2. The crimson of the dying twilight filtered in through the window, highlighting loose strands of her brown hair which looked auburn in the light.

 

[alpacinou]

Is it okay to say dying twilight?

 

[99bottles]

I want to describe a situation when the light from the sky passes through something.

Are these correct and natural?

1. The gray of the clouds seeped through the drapes, casting the room in a dreary, diffused glow.

2. The crimson of the dying twilight filtered in through the window, highlighting loose strands of her brown hair which looked auburn in the light.

(Not a teacher or a native speaker.)

I think you should keep things simple. How about this?

The twilight filtered through the window, casting a crimson light into the room.