Bassim
VIP Member
- Joined
- Mar 1, 2008
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Bosnian
- Home Country
- Bosnia Herzegovina
- Current Location
- Sweden
Would you please take a look at my sentences and correct my grammar and punctuation mistakes?
When John went to a supermarket, there were already dozens of people in a queue, young fat mothers with crying babies, teenegers with piercing and tatoos all over their bodies, excited chatty girls, noisy boys, middle-aged men with long beards and ponytails, and middle-aged women who dressed as if they still were teenagers. Everyone was eager to see a rock-star who had decided to spend a day working as a shop assistant.
When John went to a supermarket, there were already dozens of people in a queue, young fat mothers with crying babies, teenegers with piercing and tatoos all over their bodies, excited chatty girls, noisy boys, middle-aged men with long beards and ponytails, and middle-aged women who dressed as if they still were teenagers. Everyone was eager to see a rock-star who had decided to spend a day working as a shop assistant.