sania-baharat
Member
- Joined
- Jul 10, 2017
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Urdu
- Home Country
- Pakistan
- Current Location
- Iran
Could anyone please check the following paragraphs?
I can still remember vividly that when I was a teenager I was stung by a bee. For most people that is not much of a problem, but it/this hurts a lot. However, I reacted so badly to it that I ended up having to go to the hospital where they gave me an injection only to stop the reactions. What actually was happened to me was that I trod on a bee that was crawling across/along the floor in the kitchen. It was summer and I was bare-footed. My first feeling was, ‘Ow-that hurts’. Then, really quickly my foot began to go red and swell up. My mother became so worried that she insisted that we needed to go to the doctor for help unless it was getting better in a few minutes later. However, It just got bigger and bigger, and it itched too much, which made my family and I felt really worried. I was really surprised by how much it could hurt. Then, it got even scarier, after a few minutes when I began to find it difficult to breathe and to keep coughing. Luckily my family were there, and they said “Right, you are going straight to the hospital” which was quite near our house, but they drove really fast. On my arrival, I was given an injection and soon was recovered. Now, I have to be really careful in case I get stung again because it/that may have fatal consequences.
I can still remember vividly that when I was a teenager I was stung by a bee. For most people that is not much of a problem, but it/this hurts a lot. However, I reacted so badly to it that I ended up having to go to the hospital where they gave me an injection only to stop the reactions. What actually was happened to me was that I trod on a bee that was crawling across/along the floor in the kitchen. It was summer and I was bare-footed. My first feeling was, ‘Ow-that hurts’. Then, really quickly my foot began to go red and swell up. My mother became so worried that she insisted that we needed to go to the doctor for help unless it was getting better in a few minutes later. However, It just got bigger and bigger, and it itched too much, which made my family and I felt really worried. I was really surprised by how much it could hurt. Then, it got even scarier, after a few minutes when I began to find it difficult to breathe and to keep coughing. Luckily my family were there, and they said “Right, you are going straight to the hospital” which was quite near our house, but they drove really fast. On my arrival, I was given an injection and soon was recovered. Now, I have to be really careful in case I get stung again because it/that may have fatal consequences.
