upon discussing with the head technician.

[NamelessKing]

Hi, is this sentence of mine natural?

Additional capabilities will be added to the programme upon discussing with the head technician.

 

[GoesStation]

No. Try after discussion.

 

[NamelessKing]

No. Try after discussion.

Sorry, I didn't quite get that. Are you suggesting writing it as "Additional capabilities will be added to the programme after discussion with the head technician."?

 

[Tarheel]

Sorry, I didn't quite get that. Are you suggesting writing it as "Additional capabilities will be added to the programme after discussion with the head technician"?

Yes, that's much better.

 

[emsr2d2]

... technician."?

Don't put a full stop at the end of a quoted sentence if there is another punctuation mark after the quotation marks. It should end like this:

... technician"?