[Essay] Unemployment ..

[tareq-moshbb]

Introduction ..
Unemployment in its general sense means not finding work for those looking for it , and the difnition of unemployment differs from state to state .

Body ..

The causes of unemployment are many :
The first : is the population growth , which led to an increase in the number of graduates .

Second : the lack of development of education as education is a major source in the production of minds .

Third : Lack of expansion in government service facilities in cities and villages , despite the importance of this .


Conclusion ..

The problem of unemployment , as we explained earlier , is one of the most important problems facing our Arab societies , and the state must pay attention to it .

Can you correct my essay?​

 

[teechar]

Hello tareq-moshbb, and welcome to the forum.
The text you posted does not qualify as a proper and complete essay. You have some good ideas there, but you need to write more.

Take a look at my replies in the following thread, redraft your essay and post it again.

https://www.usingenglish.com/forum/threads/242490-School-education-should-be-free

What is the exact prompt for the essay you're trying to write?

 

[emsr2d2]

Tareq-mosheb, it looks like you tried to reply to teechar's post but you accidentally clicked on "Report Post" instead so your message went to a private area of the forum.

Please post your reply again, making sure you click on the word "Reply" in the bottom right-hand corner before you write.

 

[Tdol]

It's an essay plan, not an essay. You have to write the essay before anyone can suggest corrections.