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I often narrate in the present tense (stylistic preference). I have just noticed that I often use the expression that moment, and I wonder whether in a present-tense narration, I should replace it with this moment. Personally, I feel that combining that moment with a present-tense narration has an exciting emotional effect, especially in horror books (which is the genre I'm writing these days), but if you think it's wrong grammatically, I'll change it. What do you think? For example, in the sentence below ...
John is about to reply, but, this moment/that moment, someone draws the two kids' attention. (John is one of the two kids by the way.)
John is about to reply, but, this moment/that moment, someone draws the two kids' attention. (John is one of the two kids by the way.)