The significance of the computer (need correction)

[HL_Learner]

The Significance of Computer


Nobody today can dispense the computer. The computer has become one of the most basic needs in everyone's daily life. It is needed in the children's life for playing. Also, it is necessary for the adults for too many reasons. The instructors use it for teaching, and the designers cannot design without it,
and so on. The daily need for the computer made it very important.

 

[emsr2d2]

Welcome to the forum. :hi:

When are you going to submit your piece of writing to your teacher?

 

[HL_Learner]

Actually I don't have a teacher. I am here to improve my writing skills. I really will be thankful if I found teachers correcting my writings continuously. Again, I am here to gain more writing skill and to be corrected grammarly. Thanks a lot!


(I have a question. Is it allowed to post my writings here to be corrected ? thanks ! )

 

[emsr2d2]

The Significance of Computer
The Significance of the Computer

Nobody today can dispense the computer.
Today, no-one can dispense with their computer.

The computer has become one of the most basic needs in everyone's daily life.
The computer has become one of the most basic needs in people's daily lives.

It is needed in the children's life for playing.
Children need it for playing.

Also, it is necessary for the adults for too many reasons.
Adults need it for too many reasons to list.

The instructors use it for teaching, and the designers cannot design without it, and so on.
Teachers can't teach without it, designers can't design without it, etc.

The daily need for the computer made it very important.
The daily need to use a computer has made it very important.

See my suggested corrections to your sentences above. Look carefully at the amendments and ask us if you don't understand any of them.

You can post sentences and short pieces here for correction as long as they're not coursework or homework.

 

[HL_Learner]

Dear teacher Mr. emsr2d2, I really don't know how to thank you enough. Your suggested corrections are amazing and so clear to me. I have benefited from them a lot. I hope you correct my continuous weak writings. I really will be thankful. Thank you very very much. Best regards !

 

[tedmc]

Dear teacher Mr. emsr2d2, I really don't know how to thank you enough. Your suggested corrections are amazing and so clear to me. I have benefited from them a lot. I hope you[STRIKE] correct my continuous weak writings[/STRIKE] continue to correct my weak writing. I really will be thankful. Thank you very, very much. Best regards !

Emsr2d2 happens to be a Miss.

Emsr2d2
May I know why you have written 'no one' with a hyphen?

 

[HL_Learner]

Dear teacher Mr. Tedmc, thank you very, very much for your valuable comment. Indeed, I'm so happy I joined this amazing forum. It is the school that I have been dreaming of it for a couple of years. Best regards!

 

[emsr2d2]

HL_Learner, please stop using "Mr" in your posts. There is no need to say "teacher" or "Mr" (or Miss/Ms/Miss either) when addressing us. Just use our usernames. It is inappropriate to refer to people as "Mr" when you don't know what sex they are. "Mr" only refers to men.

There is no need to write a post of any length to say "Thank you". Every post has a "Thank" button in the bottom left-hand corner. Simply click on that button to thank the writer. Please click "Thank" on this post to show that you understand.