keannu
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- Dec 27, 2010
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- South Korea
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- South Korea
Source : 11 grader's performance English assessment test preparation
*General Theme : I agree/disagree with Your Argument
*Specific Question : Do you agree or disagree that the government should pay for COVID-19 treatment?
The black parts are the student's while the blue parts are my correction, if you find wrong parts, please correct them.
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The government should not pay for the COVID-19 treatment.
=> Some people claim that the government should not pay for the COVID-19 treatment.
Because of citizen’s carelessness, the COVID-19 was spread.
=> They claim it because due to some citizens' carelessness, the COVID-19 was spread more .
I agree that the government should pay for COVID-19 treatment.
=> But I agree that the government should pay for COVID-19 treatment.
First, it is difficult that low-income families pay for treatment.
=>First, it is difficult for low-income families to pay for treatment.
The cost of treatment can be hard for low-income families.
=>The cost of treatment can be burdensome for low-income families.
The government should support low-income families because they earn less than ordinary people.
Second, the government didn’t prevent COVID-19 from spreading at the beginning.
In the early days, the government didn’t block Chinese visitors.
=> In the early days of COVID-19, the government didn’t try to prevent Chinese visitors from entering Korea.
However, most of countries has banned Chinese entry.
=> However, most countries have banned Chinese entry.
For these reasons, the government should pay for COVID-19 treatment.
*General Theme : I agree/disagree with Your Argument
*Specific Question : Do you agree or disagree that the government should pay for COVID-19 treatment?
The black parts are the student's while the blue parts are my correction, if you find wrong parts, please correct them.
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The government should not pay for the COVID-19 treatment.
=> Some people claim that the government should not pay for the COVID-19 treatment.
Because of citizen’s carelessness, the COVID-19 was spread.
=> They claim it because due to some citizens' carelessness, the COVID-19 was spread more .
I agree that the government should pay for COVID-19 treatment.
=> But I agree that the government should pay for COVID-19 treatment.
First, it is difficult that low-income families pay for treatment.
=>First, it is difficult for low-income families to pay for treatment.
The cost of treatment can be hard for low-income families.
=>The cost of treatment can be burdensome for low-income families.
The government should support low-income families because they earn less than ordinary people.
Second, the government didn’t prevent COVID-19 from spreading at the beginning.
In the early days, the government didn’t block Chinese visitors.
=> In the early days of COVID-19, the government didn’t try to prevent Chinese visitors from entering Korea.
However, most of countries has banned Chinese entry.
=> However, most countries have banned Chinese entry.
For these reasons, the government should pay for COVID-19 treatment.
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