the bow of the ship cleaves through the sea

[alpacinou]

Hello

I want to describe the movement of this ship in the sea. Does the verb "cleave" work here?

Is this sentence that I have written okay?

The bow of this massive titan of a ship cleaves slowly through the vast blue sea.



I feel like it can be expressed better.

 

[Phaedrus]

Is this sentence that I have written okay?

The bow of this massive titan of a ship cleaves slowly through the vast blue sea.

I think that your sentence is OK, but that it would work better with "its way" added:

The bow of this massive titan of a ship cleaves its way slowly through the vast blue sea.

 

[alpacinou]

I think that your sentence is OK

Really? I think I am making progress thanks to this forum. :up: