[Grammar] Suddenly Kelly was in front of Kevin

[Nikitus]

Hello.

Are the following sentences grammatically correct?

"Suddenly Kelly was in front of Kevin. He felt a little dizzy and began to hallucinate. He started to saw Kelly, when she was young. This memory when they were young began to mix with reality. Her face started to get older and after a few seconds Kevin saw Kelly in the present time, as an adult woman."

Thanks,

 

[emsr2d2]

Hello.

Are the following sentences grammatically correct?

"Suddenly Kelly was in front of Kevin. He felt a little dizzy and began to hallucinate. He started to [STRIKE]saw[/STRIKE] see Kelly (no comma here) as she was when she was young. This memory of/from when they were young began to mix with reality. Her face started to get older and after a few seconds Kevin saw Kelly in the present time, as an adult [STRIKE]woman[/STRIKE]."

Thanks.

See above.