"slowly driven cars"

[spongie]

I wrote an essay for my writing class and one of the sentence of it was - "Slowly driven cars have less chance to make so many harmful damages."

I was told that the part "slowly driven cars" is wrong and sounds artificial. What do you think?

 

[susiedq]

There is nothing wrong with "Slowly driven cars" as the subject.

Here's another example:

Brightly colored clothes will be in this summer.


It's the rest of your sentence that doesn't make sense.

The entire thought could have been worded differently.

 

[spongie]

That's a good example. Thanks. But what is wrong with the rest of the sentence?

 

[BobSmith]

[not a teacher]

Some ideas:

Deleted. I'll post them later.

 

[bhaisahab]

That's a good example. Thanks. But what is wrong with the rest of the sentence?

"Slowly driven cars are less likely to...."
Now you try to rewrite the rest.

 

[shannico]

Hints:
- damages sounds strange in that context.
- make+damages don't really go together there.
I hope it helps

 

[spongie]

Slowly driven cars are less likely to cause so many damages.

How about now? Maybe "harmful damages" also sounds weird because damage itself is harmful.

 

[sumon.]

Slowly driven cars are less likely to cause so many damages.

How about now? Maybe "harmful damages" also sounds weird because damage itself is harmful.

not a teacher
Use damage as a uncountable noun.
I don't think so.
Damage itself is not harmful if we consider it physical harm that doesn't cause harm.
Ref:http://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/damage_1

 

[shannico]

Much better.

Slowly driven cars are less likely to cause serious/severe damage.

Hope it helps

 

[BobSmith]

[not a teacher]

Some ideas:

Deleted. I'll post them later.

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