loveleeyoungae
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Hi,
Due to low oil price, my company has to find a way to cut cost. So, some employees (including me) will stop working next week. At the same time, the First Deputy GD (Mr. X) will retire.
So the company is going to have a farewell party. The secretary (also the interpreter) is preparing a bannner with this message:
Dear Mr. X and Redundantees!
Thank you for your valuable contributions to our company.
Wishing you all the best for your future.
You’ ll always be remembered with love and warmth .
I have uncomfortable feeling with this message, but I'm afraid that my knowledge is not so good. That's why I'm asking for your advice here:
1. I made a quick google search and found that the info on the word "Redundantee" is extremely rare. I somehow feel that using that word in this situation is an insult.
2. The last sentence seems to only be used when someone has passed away? For normal situation, we should change that to "We will miss you"?
Am I wrong or does this message actually have issues? What would you suggest to edit to make it a better message?
Thank you very much in advance.
Due to low oil price, my company has to find a way to cut cost. So, some employees (including me) will stop working next week. At the same time, the First Deputy GD (Mr. X) will retire.
So the company is going to have a farewell party. The secretary (also the interpreter) is preparing a bannner with this message:
Dear Mr. X and Redundantees!
Thank you for your valuable contributions to our company.
Wishing you all the best for your future.
You’ ll always be remembered with love and warmth .
I have uncomfortable feeling with this message, but I'm afraid that my knowledge is not so good. That's why I'm asking for your advice here:
1. I made a quick google search and found that the info on the word "Redundantee" is extremely rare. I somehow feel that using that word in this situation is an insult.
2. The last sentence seems to only be used when someone has passed away? For normal situation, we should change that to "We will miss you"?
Am I wrong or does this message actually have issues? What would you suggest to edit to make it a better message?
Thank you very much in advance.