provision of these services vs. providing of these services

[GoodTaste]

The phrase "provision of these services" is perfect here. My question, does "providing of these services" work? It seems to be less perfect to me but it still works, in some way. I am not sure.

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(Editorial)
Contraception at Risk
The Editors
In March 2014, the U.S. Supreme Court will hear oral arguments in two cases, Sebelius v. Hobby Lobby Stores, Inc.1 and Conestoga Wood Specialties Corp. v. Sebelius.2 These cases, which arise from an Affordable Care Act mandate, will have a critical impact on women's health. At issue is whether a for-profit corporation can be required to provide coverage for contraceptive services to its employees. We believe that provision of these services meets a critical public health need and that a woman, regardless of the religious beliefs of her employer, should have access to a full panel of . . .

Source: New England Journal of Medicine
https://www.nejm.org/doi/full/10.1056/NEJMe1315461

 

[Rover_KE]

No, it doesn't.

As you said yourself, the original is perfect. Why do you want to change it?

 

[GoodTaste]

As you said yourself, the original is perfect. Why do you want to change it?

No, I didn't want to change it. The point is that if I write an article myself in future, it is important for me not to copy other people's sentences, but rather I have to write in my own words. And so I have to try out any possible correct ways to express.

 

[tzfujimino]

If you wish to use "providing", delete "of".

We believe that providing these services meets ...

 

[GoodTaste]

If you wish to use "providing", delete "of".

We believe that providing these services meets ...

"Providing these services" was among my initial options in mind and I wondered whether its formality is not as perfect as "provision of these services".

 

[GoesStation]

"Providing these services" was among my initial options in mind and I wondered whether [STRIKE]its formality is not as [/STRIKE] it's less formal than [STRIKE]as[/STRIKE] "provision of these services".

It's more conversational. More readers will be able to understand it.