[Essay] professional chef

[Ashiuhto]

Please help me correct the following paragraph. Thanks!

I love cooking. Nothing gives me more pure happiness than to pick out a recipe, get the best ingredients, try making it, and then enjoying the results. (When I was little,) I used to watch in amazement as my grandmother prepared delicious meals almost without effort, so I suppose it was under her influence that I eventually took up cooking as a hobby. I find fulfillment in cooking for loved ones because seeing their happiness when they enjoy something. Therefore, my dream in the future is to be a professional chef that can ignite my passion for food.

 

[5jj]

It's pretty good.

I love cooking. Nothing gives me more pure happiness than to pick out a recipe, get the best ingredients, try making it, and then enjoy[STRIKE]ing[/STRIKE] (If you use 'enjoying', it sounds as though you mean 'try making it and (try) enjoying) the results. (When I was little,) I used to watch in amazement as my grandmother prepared delicious meals almost without effort, so I suppose it was under her influence that I eventually took up cooking as a hobby. I find fulfillment in cooking for loved ones because I love seeing their happiness when they enjoy something. Therefore, my dream [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] for the future is to be a professional chef [STRIKE]that can[/STRIKE], which will ignite my passion for food.

I think your passion for food has already been ignited. Perhaps being a professional chef will fuel your passion.