please rephrase this sentence

[Over the top]

Hello
I have written this sentence but I don't like it

They murder some people but they get a way with their crime(have not been charged) with the help of the local police who some of them were their relatives.

Thank you.

 

[tedtmc]

Hello
I have written this sentence but I don't like it

They murder some people but they get a way with their crime(have not been charged) with the help of the local police who some of them were their relatives.

Thank you.

They get away with murder with the help of the local police who, some of them were their relatives.

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[Over the top]

Thank you very much, Gill and tedtmc.

 

[Raymott]

Hello
I have written this sentence but I don't like it

They murder some people but they get a way with their crime(have not been charged) with the help of the local police who some of them were their relatives.

Thank you.

They get away with murder with the help of the local police, some of whom were their relatives.
(I don't think the previous sentences are correct).

 

[tedtmc]

They get away with murder with the help of the local police, some of whom are their relatives.
.

Agreed.

 

[emsr2d2]

They get away with murder with the help of the local police, some of whom were their relatives.
(I don't think the previous sentences are correct).

I think there's a tense problem here. You have "get away" in the present tense, but "some of whom were" in the past tense.

I would have thought it was more likely to be:

They got away with murder with the help of the local police, some of whom are their relatives.

Presumably their relatives who work for the police are still their relatives!

If the people concerned regularly get away with murder, then the present tense would be appropriate, talking about a frequent occurrence. If that is the case, then the present tense would be used in both halves of the sentence:

They get away with murder with the help of the local police, some of whom are their relatives.

 

[Raymott]

I think there's a tense problem here. You have "get away" in the present tense, but "some of whom were" in the past tense.

I would have thought it was more likely to be:

They got away with murder with the help of the local police, some of whom are their relatives.

Presumably their relatives who work for the police are still their relatives!

If the people concerned regularly get away with murder, then the present tense would be appropriate, talking about a frequent occurrence. If that is the case, then the present tense would be used in both halves of the sentence:

They get away with murder with the help of the local police, some of whom are their relatives.

Yes, that's true. I conflated the previous answers.
My main point was to state that the following corrections are seriously wrong:

"police who some of them are/were their relatives." and
"police, some of them who are/were their relatives."