Please help me with this business email

[Niki_t]

Dear Mrs/Sir,
My name is .............and I distribute high quality wine.
I would like to introduce to you our top selection of wines and I will be grateful if you spend few minutes to see my offer.
In an attached file I’m sending you information about our most popular and successful wines in ........
Some of them are appearing in the most exquisite hotels and restaurants.
Through the years our winemakers have been awarded numerous medals from famous competitions such as Decanter, Wine Spectator and Chardonnay du Monde.
If you are interested in our wines I will be very pleased to send to you samples.
You are able to create your own sample list in the attached form which I’m sending to you.

Kind Regards
I hope it's not too bad:roll:

 

[billmcd]

Dear Mrs/Sir,
My name is .............and I [STRIKE]distribute[/STRIKE]am a distributor of high quality wine.
I would like to introduce [STRIKE]to you [/STRIKE] you to our top selection of wines and I [STRIKE]will[/STRIKE]would be grateful if you spend few minutes to [STRIKE]see[/STRIKE] review my offer.
In an attached file I’m sending you information about our most popular and successful wines in ........
Some of them are [STRIKE]appearing[/STRIKE]available in the most exquisite hotels and restaurants.
Through the years our winemakers have been awarded numerous medals from famous competitions such as Decanter, Wine Spectator and Chardonnay du Monde.
If you are interested in our wines I [STRIKE]will[/STRIKE]would be very pleased to send to you samples.
You [STRIKE]are able to [/STRIKE] can create your own sample list [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] using the attached form. [STRIKE]which I’m sending to you[/STRIKE].

Kind Regards
I hope it's not too bad:roll:

Not bad. :up: A few suggestions.

 

[Niki_t]

Thank you!