[General] Please help me to corect my story

[mooyong]

Hi teacher.
I would like you to edit my story

One afternoon, When I Came home from school, I always thought " why I must learn English". I grew up in the small farm with my family and neighborhood. They lived without English.

Next day when I had a English class, I was very surprised to see a new teacher who always held her birch in her hand.
"You came to blackboard and correct this sentence" She said that. I Came to blackboard and wrote the answer
"What's going on? Why you so stupid " She said that. End of her sound I decided living without English.
I graduated in 2006 but my English was very bad, Infact I didn't know what English will impact in my life.
After graduated 3 month, I got work my life has been changed, I had known English very important.
I want to learn English but can't because no money and no time.
10 years passed I have enough time and money I found many English class to learned but all of them didn't answer what I want.
I was very good luck when I saw some friend post on Facebook "She want to teaching English"
"I want to learn English can you teach me" I wrote that
"Yes, Sure " She answer
END.

 

[emsr2d2]

Hi teachers.
I would like you to edit my story.

One afternoon, when I came home from school, I [STRIKE]always[/STRIKE] thought "Why do I [STRIKE]must[/STRIKE] have to learn English?" I grew up [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] on [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] a small farm with my family. [STRIKE]and neighborhood.[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]They lived without English.[/STRIKE] Nobody in my neighbourhood needed to speak English.

The next day, when I had an English class, I was very surprised to see a new teacher who [STRIKE]always[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]held[/STRIKE] was holding [STRIKE]her[/STRIKE] a birch branch/stem in her hand.

"You! [STRIKE]came[/STRIKE] Come to the blackboard and correct this sentence", she said. [STRIKE]She said that.[/STRIKE] I [STRIKE]Came[/STRIKE] went to the blackboard and wrote the answer.

"What's going on? Why are you so stupid?", she said. [STRIKE]She said that.[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]End of her sound[/STRIKE] After she said it, I decided [STRIKE]living[/STRIKE] to live without English.

I graduated in 2006 but my English was very bad [STRIKE]Infact[/STRIKE] but I didn't know [STRIKE]what[/STRIKE] how English [STRIKE]will[/STRIKE] would impact in my life.

[STRIKE]After graduated[/STRIKE] 3 months after I graduated, I got [STRIKE]work[/STRIKE] a job which changed my life. [STRIKE]has been changed,[/STRIKE] I [STRIKE]had known[/STRIKE] realised that English is very important.

I want to learn English but I can't because I have no money and no time.

10 years have now passed and I have enough time and money. I have found many English classes [STRIKE]to learned[/STRIKE] but [STRIKE]all[/STRIKE] none of them [STRIKE]didn't answer what I want.[/STRIKE] meet my needs.

It was very [STRIKE]good[/STRIKE] lucky [STRIKE]when[/STRIKE] that I saw [STRIKE]some[/STRIKE] a friend post on Facebook "[STRIKE]She[/STRIKE] I want to [STRIKE]teaching[/STRIKE] teach English."

I replied "I want to learn English. Can you teach me?" [STRIKE]I wrote that[/STRIKE]

"Yes, sure", she answered.
END.

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[mooyong]

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[emsr2d2]

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