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[FONT=trebuchet ms, geneva]One person commented to my essay saying that- "[/FONT][FONT=Arial, geneva, lucida, lucida grande, arial, helvetica, sans-serif]every single sentence is poorly constructed". However I don't seem to comprehend where my essay is greatly wrong for it to be remarked as "poorly constructed". I checked the grammar and the content and there might be some minor grammatical problems but would it be sufficient for the conclusion? Please help me as I am turning out to be very insecure with my English communication ability.
Here is a part of my essay about politics in religion;
[/FONT]Of those who held political hierarchy; of those established to intimidate for obedience, are those with intent none but earthly power. Religion is a way of living than a field asserting metaphysical truth. One for instance shan’t be, at all circumstances, a person with a democratic tenet because of the introduction of new democracy headed by George Washington nor he be of the shade of that belief because of the existence of George Washington, but because it has a rational effect, likewise should be of religion removing the view of putting much importance in the metaphysical context of the existence of central figure but so forgets that it is of less importance. It should be that the empathy be laid in the shoes of the divine sufferer, being of a religion is practicing the tenets of that faith that sought to point in maximizing goodness in all parts of morality from intent to its ends essential for his earthly endeavors. That in this approach there shan’t be any contesting faiths of who is correct but much better; what is the best in accordance with the use of his utmost rational capacity. Yes, religion is ethical than metaphysical.
Here is a part of my essay about politics in religion;
[/FONT]Of those who held political hierarchy; of those established to intimidate for obedience, are those with intent none but earthly power. Religion is a way of living than a field asserting metaphysical truth. One for instance shan’t be, at all circumstances, a person with a democratic tenet because of the introduction of new democracy headed by George Washington nor he be of the shade of that belief because of the existence of George Washington, but because it has a rational effect, likewise should be of religion removing the view of putting much importance in the metaphysical context of the existence of central figure but so forgets that it is of less importance. It should be that the empathy be laid in the shoes of the divine sufferer, being of a religion is practicing the tenets of that faith that sought to point in maximizing goodness in all parts of morality from intent to its ends essential for his earthly endeavors. That in this approach there shan’t be any contesting faiths of who is correct but much better; what is the best in accordance with the use of his utmost rational capacity. Yes, religion is ethical than metaphysical.