[Essay] Please help me correct my essay

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Once I was really mad. It was a few years ago, I got in a fight with my friend at a party. I almost hit my friend if the other friends didn't stop me. My friends were surprised because it was the first time I got that rate. I brought my mad home and spoke the big voice to my parent who were complaining me about going home late. It was the worst part, I shared my angry to my parent, and they were even more angry than me. Finally, the consequence of my terrible mood was they didn't give me the money for two weeks. That time was so bad, I did terrible things, and I hope I will never be like that again.

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