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[FONT=新細明體]This is a short script, could you help me check and edit it?[/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]Thanks a lot.[/FONT]
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[FONT=新細明體]<David is waiting for Eden, because he knows Eden has a class on the morning>[/FONT]
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[FONT=新細明體]Eden ad , I have to go now! Bye!( sleep over the time , then run out of the door)[/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]Brian : Eden , you forget to bring your breakfast! (go out the door) [/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]David: uncle! I can take the breakfast to Eden !(hear the words of Eden said, immediately go to next door to take breakfast with Brian) [/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]Brian: Really ! Thank you very much![/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]David: Wait! You must have to remember to eat breakfast!(At the moment Eden is going to the class, Eden takes the breakfast for Eden)[/FONT]
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[FONT=新細明體]<Or, when see Eden need help> [/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體](it’s raining after the class) [/FONT]
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[FONT=新細明體]Eden: oops , I forget to bring an umbrella..[/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]David: you will catch a cold !(he see Eden have no umbrella ,go with Eden) [/FONT]
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[FONT=新細明體]<Or suddenly see Eden is pouring a trash> [/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]Edentake a trash with hard look)[/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]David:Let me do that!(he pretending pass and help Eden take the trash ,when he see Eden there) [/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]David: We meet again[FONT=新]!(after pouring the trash) [/FONT][/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]Eden: Yes[FONT=新]![/FONT]I would like to go home now [FONT=新]![/FONT]And you[FONT=新]?[/FONT][/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]David:[/FONT]Un..(with hesitant look..teacher says that if I don’t go to the calss,he may fails me.. but.when David think he can go home with Eden happily ,he immediately says ) yes, I want to go home ,too. Let’s go!
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[FONT=新細明體]Eden: Do you think we meet often ? It’s so strange..[/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]David: ha! I think it must be destiny!(hold the Eden's hand)[/FONT]
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[FONT=新細明體]This is a short script, could you help me check and edit it?[/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]Thanks a lot.[/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體][/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]<David is waiting for Eden, because he knows Eden has a class on the morning>[/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體] [/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]Eden ad , I have to go now! Bye!( sleep over the time , then run out of the door)[/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]Brian : Eden , you forget to bring your breakfast! (go out the door) [/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]David: uncle! I can take the breakfast to Eden !(hear the words of Eden said, immediately go to next door to take breakfast with Brian) [/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]Brian: Really ! Thank you very much![/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]David: Wait! You must have to remember to eat breakfast!(At the moment Eden is going to the class, Eden takes the breakfast for Eden)[/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體] [/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]<Or, when see Eden need help> [/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體](it’s raining after the class) [/FONT]
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[FONT=新細明體]Eden: oops , I forget to bring an umbrella..[/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]David: you will catch a cold !(he see Eden have no umbrella ,go with Eden) [/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體] [/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]<Or suddenly see Eden is pouring a trash> [/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]Edentake a trash with hard look)[/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]David:Let me do that!(he pretending pass and help Eden take the trash ,when he see Eden there) [/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]David: We meet again[FONT=新]!(after pouring the trash) [/FONT][/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]Eden: Yes[FONT=新]![/FONT]I would like to go home now [FONT=新]![/FONT]And you[FONT=新]?[/FONT][/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]David:[/FONT]Un..(with hesitant look..teacher says that if I don’t go to the calss,he may fails me.. but.when David think he can go home with Eden happily ,he immediately says ) yes, I want to go home ,too. Let’s go!
[FONT=新細明體] [/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]Eden: Do you think we meet often ? It’s so strange..[/FONT]
[FONT=新細明體]David: ha! I think it must be destiny!(hold the Eden's hand)[/FONT]
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