[Grammar] please correct two sentences

[Zoe2008]

Except the point 4, all the LC text is fine. Please request customer to change the point 4 - "copy certificate of inspection issued by ABC company" it will be more clear to avoid any confusion.

Please find attached revised document which has been added the PO 123 on it. Furthermore, how is the schedule? It must ship before CNY holiday, please provide us it today,

 

[euncu]

***not a teacher***
***not a native-speaker***

Except the point 4, all the LC text is fine. Please request customer to change the point 4 - "copy certificate of inspection issued by ABC company" it will be more clear to avoid any confusion.

The entire LC text is fine but the point 4. Please request the customer to revise the point 4 as "copy (a copy of the or copy the ...?) certificate of inspection issued by ABC company" ,so that (or thus) any confusion can be avoided.


Please find attached revised document which has been added the PO 123 on it (Have no clue???). Furthermore, how is the schedule going(or are you on schedule)? It must be shipped before CNY holiday, please provide us it today,

 

[RonBee]

Say:
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Except for point 4....
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[Nightmare85]

Neither a teacher nor a native speaker.

I would say:
Please find the attached revised document which has added the PO 123.
(I hope "has added" is correct, because "has the PO 123 added" was my 2nd thought...)
You also could say:
Please find the attached revised document which contains the PO 123.

1. You refer to a special document, the document.
2. The PO 123 seems to be added to the document.

Cheers!

 

[RonBee]

Except for point 4, all the LC text is fine. Please ask the customer to change [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] point 4 - "copy certificate of inspection issued by ABC company" so it will be more clear and avoid any confusion.

Please find attached a revised document which has [STRIKE]been added [/STRIKE]the PO 123 affixed to it. Furthermore, how is the schedule? The package must ship before CNY holiday. Please give us the schedule today.

What do you think?