jintong
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This writing is about How do children should spend their free time.
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In this day and age,free time are playing increasingly impotant roles in our lives.Yet at the same time,people are dicided over whether how does children spend their free time.Some people contend that this time should be used to more school work,while many people argue that this time relax their bodies and ease their minds.Speaking for myself,i agree the latter.
It is obvious that children spend free time on some leisure.In the first place,many children find the schooling in traditional schools monotonous and unmotivating.Therefore,they need to have some leisure activities to release our stress.In the second place, parents play key roles in their children's growth.For instance,children who do not feel secure at home may lack confidence at school.Specifically,on some leisure they learn teamwork spirit,which will help them cooperate with others in future.Lastly,in the school they have to do many school work.In other words,on some leisure they can develop their hobbies and find out what they are really interested in.
Admittedly,children should spend their free time do more school work.The reason for this is that children may give up their study and spend all the time on some leisure.Obviously,do more school work can develop their study.Nevertheless,school afford children the pleasure of learning is not enough.For instance,the school also cultivate children of responsibility.
In summary,i would concede that children should spend time on some leisure.Overall,i am convinced that some leisure should enrich their experience.
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