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[aamer313]

I would like to recognize Marie for her commitment and hard work while we were dealing with a challenging financing proposal from her prospective client (Referral from biggest client on her desk). Unfortunately we weren’t able to find a perfect solution / fit for the client even after discussing the deal with specialized financing groups i.e. Mergers & Acquisition group, High leverage financing group and Mezzanine finance group.
The way she handled the whole situation was tremendous, she delivered the tough message in a professional and timely manner while keeping in mind the relationship with existing client. Great job Marie.

 

[teechar]

I would like to recognize Marie for her commitment and hard work while we were dealing with a challenging financing proposal from her prospective client (referral from the biggest client on her desk). Unfortunately we weren't able to find a perfect solution fit for the client even after discussing the deal with specialized financing groups i.e. the Mergers & Acquisition Group, the High Leverage Financing Group and the Mezzanine Finance Group.
The way she handled the whole situation was tremendous. She delivered the tough message in a professional and timely manner while keeping in mind the relationship with the existing client. Great job Marie.