Online Development 2

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Online Development - Making online friends causes problems.

However, as the online world developed, even apps to make friends online were created. Even an app has been created to make Korean and Japanese friends online. Kakao Talk create online open chats where you can make friends online from all over the country. Moreover, you can make a boyfriend or a girlfriend.

I object to making friends online. Not long ago, I watched online news that a boy made an online friend, met her several times because he became fond of her, but later when she refused him, he stalked and murdered her. Of course, if you are lucky to meet a good friend, there is no problem, but online can cause considerable problems.
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Online Development - Making online friends causes problems.

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I object to making friends online. Not long ago, I watched online news that a boy made [STRIKE]an online friend[/STRIKE] friends with a girl online, met her several times because he [STRIKE]became fond of [/STRIKE] liked her, but later, when she [STRIKE]refused [/STRIKE] rejected him, he stalked her and later murdered her. Of course, if you are lucky to meet a good [STRIKE]friend[/STRIKE] person online and becomes friends, there is no problem, but [STRIKE]online can cause[/STRIKE] there have been cases where friendships made online encounter considerable problems.
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[Tarheel]

I object to meeting friends online.

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You need to be careful about meeting people you get acquainted with online.