[Grammar] Once finished the first stage

[Nikitus]

Hello.

Are the following sentences grammatically correct?

"Once finished the first stage of his new self-imposed ritual, Tim left the building where he lived wearing and old shirt, blue shorts and sandals with socks. He walked a couple of blocks looking for the right place for the second stage, which he found near a plaza. In that place, Tim took a velvet pouch which contains his "lucky coins" out of his pocket shorts. Then, he took out three coins with a strange figure on one side and throws the coins on the floor."


Thanks.

 

[emsr2d2]

Hello.

Are the following sentences grammatically correct?

"Once he had finished the first stage of his new self-imposed ritual, Tim left the building where he lived wearing [STRIKE]and[/STRIKE] an old shirt, blue shorts and sandals with socks. He walked a couple of blocks, looking for the right place for the second stage, which he found near a plaza. [STRIKE]In that place,[/STRIKE] There, Tim took a velvet pouch which contained his "lucky coins" out of [STRIKE]his[/STRIKE] the pocket of his shorts. Then (no comma here) he took out three coins with a strange figure on one side and [STRIKE]throws[/STRIKE] threw the coins on the floor."

Thanks.

See above.