Bassim
VIP Member
- Joined
- Mar 1, 2008
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Bosnian
- Home Country
- Bosnia Herzegovina
- Current Location
- Sweden
Would you please correct the mistakes in this text, which I wrote just as an exercise.
On his last workday before retirement, Andy received dozens of presents from his colleagues. They came up to him, shook his hand, patted him friendly on the shoulder and wished him happy retirement. They grinned at him and were the embodiment of kindness and compassion, but Andy knew this was just a facade behind which skulked malice and envy. He had been working with them for decades and knew they were glad to see the back of him. He went back to his cubicle and, out of curiosity, opened one of the bags he just received. It contained a few packs of incontinence pads for men. He picked up a blue, soft pack and felt as if someone had smeared his face with excrement. His body was burning, the rage building up inside him. He heard sniggers and whispers - schadenfreude, which was their nourishment. They were like rats spreading disease. If he had a gun with him, he wouldn't hesitate a moment. He would calmly walk over and shoot them right in the head. All six of them.
He put the pack back in the bag, which she tossed under the desk. He was going to stay calm those few remaining hours, and then close the door behind him and never come back. But he had not finished with them. He had a plan. He was going to pick them up one after another and take revenge for all he had gone through. He had plenty of time before him. People say you should enjoy your retirement. He would surely do.
On his last workday before retirement, Andy received dozens of presents from his colleagues. They came up to him, shook his hand, patted him friendly on the shoulder and wished him happy retirement. They grinned at him and were the embodiment of kindness and compassion, but Andy knew this was just a facade behind which skulked malice and envy. He had been working with them for decades and knew they were glad to see the back of him. He went back to his cubicle and, out of curiosity, opened one of the bags he just received. It contained a few packs of incontinence pads for men. He picked up a blue, soft pack and felt as if someone had smeared his face with excrement. His body was burning, the rage building up inside him. He heard sniggers and whispers - schadenfreude, which was their nourishment. They were like rats spreading disease. If he had a gun with him, he wouldn't hesitate a moment. He would calmly walk over and shoot them right in the head. All six of them.
He put the pack back in the bag, which she tossed under the desk. He was going to stay calm those few remaining hours, and then close the door behind him and never come back. But he had not finished with them. He had a plan. He was going to pick them up one after another and take revenge for all he had gone through. He had plenty of time before him. People say you should enjoy your retirement. He would surely do.