[Essay] need help ! writing a letter to an university

[anaiss]

hi everybody,
i'm truying to contact an university, would you help me please and see the email that i wrote

Dear sir or madam
I am writing you to request for more information about continuing my education at your university.
I am currently a 3rd year student in engineering computer sience school (my school name) in (My country), i get my baccalaureate with a high degree in 2014, then I joined my current engineering school where I learned the basics of computer science engineering. I am interested in your computer science course(UCAS Course Code: *****) with MENG (HONS) qualification.
I am writing to you with the desire to join your students this year 2017, I am highly interested to attending your university and develop my skills.
Thank you for your attention to my request. I look forward to receive your response.
Kind regards.

thank you all for reading and helping if it's possible.

 

[teechar]

Hi everybody,
I'm trying to [STRIKE]contact an[/STRIKE] ask for information from a university. Would you help me please and [STRIKE]see[/STRIKE] check the email that I wrote?

Dear sir or Madam,

I am writing [STRIKE]you[/STRIKE] to request [STRIKE]for[/STRIKE] more information about continuing my education at your university.

I am currently a 3rd-year student in engineering computer science school (my school name) in (My country). [STRIKE]i get[/STRIKE] I got my high school baccalaureate [STRIKE]with a high degree[/STRIKE] in 2014, then I joined my current engineering school where I learned the basics of computer science engineering. I am interested in your computer science course (UCAS Course Code: *****) with MENG (HONS) qualification.

I am [STRIKE]writing to you with the desire to join your students[/STRIKE] interested in applying this year [STRIKE]2017, I am highly interested[/STRIKE] to attend [STRIKE]ing[/STRIKE] your university. [STRIKE]and develop my skills.[/STRIKE]

Thank you for your attention to my request. I look forward to receiving detailed information about the course. [STRIKE]your response.[/STRIKE]

Kind regards,

Hello anaiss, and welcome to the forum.