Erbab
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Hi all,
I am preparing for IELTS and writing essays to improve my writing skills. I wrote this essay as an answer this question that I found in Cambridge Practice Tests for Ielts 2
Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
"Nations Getting Together
Well-known organizations such as football World Cup are obligatory to soften international relations and release friendly feelings safely. They are considered as a kind of bridge connecting different nations to each other. However, I totally disagree with this opinion. Ambitious/Pushing nature of those events often damage those relations.
First of all, the competitive atmosphere in such organisations make people focus on the result instead of the process which is more likely to create a bondage between other communities. For example, referees could be paid to make mistaken/wrong decisions in favor of one team in a football match. Because winning the game is much more important than getting together for an activity. There is no doubt that cheating is something that harms people's friendly/amicable/kindly emotions especially when it is easily detected/recognised. Therefore, international competitions may worsen relations since people are highly likely to succumb to their temptation to come first. (or succumb to their ambition ?)
Secondly, that sort of occasions may cause a brawl. Since people may not accept the fact that their nation is beaten in a sport game, after or during the event, they can attack to opponent fans and players. When these kinds of terrible things happen, it often ends up with political problems between related countries.
In conclusion, people are inclined to be succesfull in competitive events rather than to just enjoy spending quality time. When it comes to international occasions, people may become much more ambitious, and it is likely to end up with huge problems. "
I am preparing for IELTS and writing essays to improve my writing skills. I wrote this essay as an answer this question that I found in Cambridge Practice Tests for Ielts 2
Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
"Nations Getting Together
Well-known organizations such as football World Cup are obligatory to soften international relations and release friendly feelings safely. They are considered as a kind of bridge connecting different nations to each other. However, I totally disagree with this opinion. Ambitious/Pushing nature of those events often damage those relations.
First of all, the competitive atmosphere in such organisations make people focus on the result instead of the process which is more likely to create a bondage between other communities. For example, referees could be paid to make mistaken/wrong decisions in favor of one team in a football match. Because winning the game is much more important than getting together for an activity. There is no doubt that cheating is something that harms people's friendly/amicable/kindly emotions especially when it is easily detected/recognised. Therefore, international competitions may worsen relations since people are highly likely to succumb to their temptation to come first. (or succumb to their ambition ?)
Secondly, that sort of occasions may cause a brawl. Since people may not accept the fact that their nation is beaten in a sport game, after or during the event, they can attack to opponent fans and players. When these kinds of terrible things happen, it often ends up with political problems between related countries.
In conclusion, people are inclined to be succesfull in competitive events rather than to just enjoy spending quality time. When it comes to international occasions, people may become much more ambitious, and it is likely to end up with huge problems. "
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