Bassim
VIP Member
- Joined
- Mar 1, 2008
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Bosnian
- Home Country
- Bosnia Herzegovina
- Current Location
- Sweden
Would you please correct the following sentences, which are from a text I am currently writing.
My tragedy had not begun with the war but my decision to search refuge by the people whose character is opposite mine. I am fire; they are ice, I am a storm; they are a breeze. I am a scream; they are a whisper. I am a wild river; they are a placed lake.
My impotence was eating me inside, and the only thing I could do was passively watch my suffering as if I was watching a drama without a beginning and an end. For this kind of illness, there was no cure; medicine and therapies were useless. I had no one to turn for help and no one to ask for advice, not because there were no kind people willing to help, but because my problems were beyond this world.
My tragedy had not begun with the war but my decision to search refuge by the people whose character is opposite mine. I am fire; they are ice, I am a storm; they are a breeze. I am a scream; they are a whisper. I am a wild river; they are a placed lake.
My impotence was eating me inside, and the only thing I could do was passively watch my suffering as if I was watching a drama without a beginning and an end. For this kind of illness, there was no cure; medicine and therapies were useless. I had no one to turn for help and no one to ask for advice, not because there were no kind people willing to help, but because my problems were beyond this world.