My accent

[mohsendoraghi]

Hi, I would be very appreciate if you could hear my recording sound and give your comments on that .
http://vocaroo.com/i/s1bPNfdGdOmk
The text
http://www.myenglishpages.com/site_php_files/reading-santa-claus.php#.U_rkmJuGXbV
Thank you in advance.

 

[Charlie Bernstein]

What would you like to know?

 

[Tdol]

You should work on your intonation- you have a tendency to overstress certain sounds so that they 'jump' out at the listener, which can make it more difficult for people to follow.

Also, try recording yourself just speaking- reading a text is not a natural act, so it makes for a less natural recording.

 

[mohsendoraghi]

What would you like to know?

Thank you for your interest. I like to know how my accent sounds, considering pronunciation ,stress ,intonation and,,,,,and also is it obvious that I'm from Iran?that is the information I like to know .

You should work on your intonation- you have a tendency to overstress certain sounds so that they 'jump' out at the listener, which can make it more difficult for people to follow.

Also, try recording yourself just speaking- reading a text is not a natural act, so it makes for a less natural recording.

Thank you Tdol for your feedback I toke into consideration your advice regarding intonation and I came up with the new one .I will be very glad if you could listen to it and give your comment on that .
http://vocaroo.com/i/s1kp5qD4elFM