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Hi there. Would you please proofread the following text? Any help would be appreciated.
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Time, as it does, moved ever onward, and Lanhua, now ten, continued to dream of things to come, ordinary things, mostly benign things, though a few times of minor accidents or natural occurrences that resulted in injury. One particular set of dreams was not so insignificant.
These dreams began with a tiny new star; in each dream that followed, the star seemed bigger. In the final dream/vision, Lanhua is holding a child on the top of a mountain, looking at the night sky; she feels taller, and she wonders if the child is hers.
The star had now become a group of stars. Lanhua speaks to the child she is holding along with a few others she only senses are there. “It’s good that we are leaving now. Tomorrow night they will bring fire and destruction, but they will not bring our deaths.”
The dream ends as her brother puts his daughter on Moogh’s back. Yang says. “Come on, old friend, we can come back in a few days”.
Lanhua did not tell her mother about the dreams. At first, when she realised they were prophetic, she became too scared, but the final vision calmed her, and so she told her mother. Jingying said. “You, we, might have to reveal to the village at some point that you have prophetic dream/visions; otherwise, they may not believe you when they need to later.” Lanhua just nodded, she somehow knew such secrets must eventually come out.
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Time, as it does, moved ever onward, and Lanhua, now ten, continued to dream of things to come, ordinary things, mostly benign things, though a few times of minor accidents or natural occurrences that resulted in injury. One particular set of dreams was not so insignificant.
These dreams began with a tiny new star; in each dream that followed, the star seemed bigger. In the final dream/vision, Lanhua is holding a child on the top of a mountain, looking at the night sky; she feels taller, and she wonders if the child is hers.
The star had now become a group of stars. Lanhua speaks to the child she is holding along with a few others she only senses are there. “It’s good that we are leaving now. Tomorrow night they will bring fire and destruction, but they will not bring our deaths.”
The dream ends as her brother puts his daughter on Moogh’s back. Yang says. “Come on, old friend, we can come back in a few days”.
Lanhua did not tell her mother about the dreams. At first, when she realised they were prophetic, she became too scared, but the final vision calmed her, and so she told her mother. Jingying said. “You, we, might have to reveal to the village at some point that you have prophetic dream/visions; otherwise, they may not believe you when they need to later.” Lanhua just nodded, she somehow knew such secrets must eventually come out.
