rodgers white
Senior Member
- Joined
- Jan 17, 2016
- Member Type
- English Teacher
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- Chinese
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- China
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- China
Hi there. Would you please proofread the following text? Any help would be appreciated.
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After talking with those that were now aware of Lanhua’s dream of the asteroids and also convinced that she had dreamed truth, they decided that it was time to inform the council of elders so that they could make preparations. The elders, though mostly accepting of Lanhua’s ability, were sceptical, it sounded too fantastic, and not just a simple dream about pregnancy or twins, so some argument ensued.
However, Leixi, the oldest of the elders, interjected. “Children!!!” The silence was immediate. “All this bickering gets us nowhere. The child’s skill is proved. We have been given a warning in good time, and I don’t plan on wasting it in pointless arguments.” The other elders now started talking calmly amongst themselves, and Leixi turned to Gan and Jiang who had presented the dream to the council.
“You two will be in charge of finding a place our two hundred and fifty-three villagers can safely stay when the time comes, choose your team but do not let the dream loose just yet, we have plenty of time before the rest need to know. I want some positive news to balance the bad, something that will rally them together, not set them apart.”
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After talking with those that were now aware of Lanhua’s dream of the asteroids and also convinced that she had dreamed truth, they decided that it was time to inform the council of elders so that they could make preparations. The elders, though mostly accepting of Lanhua’s ability, were sceptical, it sounded too fantastic, and not just a simple dream about pregnancy or twins, so some argument ensued.
However, Leixi, the oldest of the elders, interjected. “Children!!!” The silence was immediate. “All this bickering gets us nowhere. The child’s skill is proved. We have been given a warning in good time, and I don’t plan on wasting it in pointless arguments.” The other elders now started talking calmly amongst themselves, and Leixi turned to Gan and Jiang who had presented the dream to the council.
“You two will be in charge of finding a place our two hundred and fifty-three villagers can safely stay when the time comes, choose your team but do not let the dream loose just yet, we have plenty of time before the rest need to know. I want some positive news to balance the bad, something that will rally them together, not set them apart.”