[Vocabulary] Message to a social network

[Cristina.W]

I have recently thought of sending a feedback message to a social network, and I wish you would tell me if I made any errors:
"It would be better if people's comments did not disappear when they deactivate their account. That way, the abscence of certain comments would not be so confusing and inesthetic. So I suggest although someone's account could not be accessed, the comments they have left before deactivation should still be seen."
Did I miss any comma?
Is it too stilted?
Thank you.

 

[billmcd]

I have recently thought of sending a feedback message to a social network, and I wish you would tell me if I made any errors:
"It would be better if people's comments did not disappear when they deactivate their account. That way, the absence of certain comments would not be so confusing and inesthetic (?). So I suggest [STRIKE] although [/STRIKE] that while someone's account [STRIKE] could [/STRIKE] might not be [STRIKE] accessed [/STRIKE] accessible , the comments they have left before deactivation should still be [STRIKE] seen [/STRIKE] available."
Did I miss any comma?
Is it too stilted?
Thank you.

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