Merry Riana is forced to migrate

[Gaya87]

Merry Rianas
Short Synopsis
Merry Riana is forced to migrate to Singapore alone due to the political instability in her country. When she arrives at Singapore she has nothing to survive but luckily she meets her friend, Irene.

Long Synopsis
Merry Riana recently graduated from high school and is forced to migrate to Singapore alone due to the political instability in her country. Her father tells her to go to her uncle’s place for a while until the whole family has enough money to join her. But Merry finds her uncle’s place empty. Roaming aimlessly around the city, she meets her high school friend Irene. With the help of Irene, Merry overcomes the financial burden.

 

[Rover_KE]

Re: Please help me to check these write up below (ASAP). Thank You!

Gaya, you cannot keep giving your threads the same or very similar titles. 'Merry Riana' would have been a good title for this one.

Please do not post again until the existing threads have been considered.

As these seem to be student assignments, which we don't help with until their teachers have seen them, you will probably not receive many replies.

 

[Gaya87]

Re: Please help me to check these write up below (ASAP). Thank You!

Noted with thanks, Rover. My apologies! As I'm very new to this site I still find myself getting familiar with the procedure. As you mentioned in your earlier reply "TEACHERS", can I know you are referring to which teachers? You mean the forum teachers? By the way, this is not assignment. Actually I've just started to write a blog and posting some movies synopsis. So sometimes, I face some difficulties in grammar and unsure with some words.

 

[teechar]

Re: Please help me to check these write up below (ASAP). Thank You!

Merry Rianas
Short Synopsis
Merry Riana is forced to migrate to Singapore alone due to the political instability in her country. When she arrives [STRIKE]at[/STRIKE] in Singapore she has nothing to survive, but luckily she meets her friend, Irene.

Long Synopsis
Merry Riana recently graduated from high school and is forced to migrate to Singapore alone due to the political instability in her country. Her father tells her to go to her uncle’s place for a while until the whole family has enough money to join her. But Merry finds her uncle’s place empty. Roaming aimlessly around the city, she meets her high school friend Irene. With the help of Irene, Merry overcomes [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] her financial difficulties. [STRIKE]burden.[/STRIKE]

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[Gaya87]

Re: Please help me to check these write up below (ASAP). Thank You!

Teechar, is my short synopsis incomplete or hanging? Is good to go?

 

[Rover_KE]

Re: Please help me to check these write up below (ASAP). Thank You!

As you mentioned in your earlier reply "TEACHERS", can I know you are referring to which teachers? You mean the forum teachers? No — I meant the teachers of the students who expect us to correct their work before they submit it for marking/grading.

By the way, this is not assignment. Actually I've just started to write a blog and posting some movies synopsis. In that case, the title of the movie would make a good title for the thread.

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[Gaya87]

Re: Please help me to check these write up below (ASAP). Thank You!

Alright, that's a good one! I will do for sure! Thanks for your kind feedback, Rover.

 

[teechar]

Re: Please help me to check these write up below (ASAP). Thank You!

Teechar, is my short synopsis incomplete or hanging? Is it good to go?

No and yes.

 

[Gaya87]

Re: Please help me to check these write up below (ASAP). Thank You!

Teacher, could you please indicate why you’re using in instead of at? (The underline words as below)
Merry Riana is forced to migrate to Singapore alone due to the political instability in her country. When she arrives at in Singapore she has nothing to survive, but luckily she meets her friend, Irene.

 

[teechar]

Re: Please help me to check these write up below (ASAP). Thank You!

You arrive in (not at) a particular country/city.