Liz arrived home at midnight

[alpacinou]

Is this correct and natural?

Liz arrived home at midnight. She slumped onto the sofa in the living room, and quickly fell into a deep slumber. She had the crazy dream again. She was running on a gentle slope coated with grass. There were splotches of orange paint, and this time, blood on the grass. Huge gray wolves were chasing her. She ran until she arrived at a wide highway. All the cars blasted their horns and she screamed at them.

 

[emsr2d2]

Is this correct and natural?

Liz arrived home at midnight. She slumped onto the sofa in the living room, and quickly fell into a deep slumber. She had the crazy dream again. She was running on a gentle grassy slope. [STRIKE]coated with grass.[/STRIKE] There were splotches of orange paint no comma here and, this time, blood on the grass. Huge gray wolves were chasing her. She ran until she [STRIKE]arrived at[/STRIKE] reached a wide highway. [STRIKE]All the[/STRIKE] Cars blasted their horns at her and she screamed back at them.

See above.

I've underlined two words. I seem to recall that you favour BrE in your writing so note that they would be "grey" and "motorway/road".

 

[Tarheel]

Try:

She had that dream again. The one in which she's being chased by wolves.