Lisa touched the key card

[alpacinou]

Is this correct and natural?

Lisa touched the key card to the room's card reader, opened the door and entered her room on the 27th floor of the hotel. After taking a few stops, she froze, letting out a faint moan. A man in a dark suit was standing by the room's window, looking out. Dark, furious clouds were rolling in from ocean to envelop Miami in a gray cloak. Lisa's heart beat faster as she stared at the stranger. The overhead recessed lights highlighted his outline. He turned around and let out a low laugh. He had patchy beard and his black hair was parted to the right. "Hello Lisa. I see that you are surprised. I'm here for the money." There was menace in his voice and Lisa's stomach churned with anxiety.

 

[emsr2d2]

Is this correct and natural?

Lisa touched the key card to the room's card reader, opened the door and entered her room on the 27th floor of the hotel. After taking a few steps, she froze, letting out a faint moan. A man in a dark suit was standing by the [STRIKE]room's[/STRIKE] window, looking out. Dark, furious clouds were rolling in from the ocean to envelop Miami in a grey cloak. Lisa's heart beat faster as she stared at the stranger. The [STRIKE]overhead[/STRIKE] recessed lights overhead highlighted his outline. He turned around and let out a low laugh. He had a patchy beard and his black hair was parted to the right. "Hello, Lisa. I see that you are surprised to see me. I'm here for the money." There was menace in his voice and Lisa's stomach churned with anxiety.

emsr2d2

 

[tedmc]

A key card doesn't really touch the card reader does it? What is the action called, to have the card read?

 

[emsr2d2]

That's exactly what it does. There's a flat panel on the door and you just touch or tap it with the card and the door opens. It works the same way as contactless card payments in shops.

 

[Tdol]

You could delete room's without losing much for me- it's a hotel and we learn it's a room on the 27th floor. It's labouring the point for me.

 

[Yankee]

In that situation I would expect more than a "faint moan" from Lisa. :shock: