LinkedIn - Short Paragraph

[Economist2010]

Hi All,

I would like to say the following: (please proofread it)

" For those who underestimate the value of LinkedIn in finding jobs. All my jobs since I firstly made a LinkedIn account at 2009 was through it. It is really a useful tool for job seekers"

 

[Tarheel]

Hi all.

I would like to say the following (please proofread it):

"For those who underestimate the value of LinkedIn in finding jobs. All my jobs since I created a LinkedIn account in 2009 have been through it. It is really a useful tool for job seekers."

~R

 

[emsr2d2]

For those who underestimate the value of LinkedIn in finding jobs.

That's not a complete sentence.

 

[Economist2010]

~R

Is there a possibility for this paragraph to be totally proofread.

 

[emsr2d2]

That's what Tarheel did in post #2. Do you think something has been missed?

 

[Tarheel]

Is there a possibility for this paragraph to be totally proofread?

I figured that first "sentence" was a sentence fragment on purpose. (It could easily be changed.) Other than that, what?

 

[tedmc]

The second second is awkward and should be rephrased.

 

[emsr2d2]

The second second is awkward and should be rephrased.

.

 

[Tarheel]

The second sentence is awkward and should be rephrased.

I did change it. I suppose you could say:

I have gotten all my jobs through my LinkedIn account since I created it.