[Grammar] Kevin was a superstitious guy right? Maybe

[Nikitus]

Hello.

Are the following sentences grammatically correct?

"After telling her idea to Tim, she smiles, osing herself in her own thoughts, imagining how everything will happen on her vivid imagination."

Thanks.

 

[emsr2d2]

Hello.

Are the following sentences grammatically correct?

"After telling Tim her idea, [STRIKE]to Tim,[/STRIKE] she smiles, losing herself in her [STRIKE]own[/STRIKE] thoughts, vividly imagining how everything will happen." [STRIKE]on in her vivid imagination."[/STRIKE]

Thanks.

See above.