[Grammar] Kevin began to run towards that mysterious

[Nikitus]

Hello.

Are the following sentences grammatically correct?

"Kevin began to run towards that mysterious person with the familiar face, nevertheless its bad physical condition due to his evident overweight and sedentary lifestyle made that it could not continue running and was forced to stop completely. He felt a strong sense of choking, so he must sat down.

At that moment a vision appeared before his eyes. The mysterious familiar face walked towards him and he could realize that it was Kelly from twenty-five years ago, when he was at high school. Suddenly, Kelly's vision disappeared altogether."

Thanks.

 

[teechar]

Hello.

Are the following sentences grammatically correct?

"Kevin began to run towards that mysterious person with the familiar face, [STRIKE]nevertheless its bad physical condition due to his evident overweight and sedentary lifestyle made that it[/STRIKE] but because of his heavy weight and lack of fitness, he could not continue running and was forced to stop completely. He [STRIKE]felt a strong sense of choking, so he must sat[/STRIKE] was out of breath and had to sit down.

At that moment, a vision appeared before his eyes. The mysterious familiar face walked towards him and he could [STRIKE]realize[/STRIKE] discern that it was Kelly from twenty-five years ago, when he was at high school. Suddenly, [STRIKE]Kelly's[/STRIKE] that vision of Kelly disappeared altogether."

Thanks.

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