rodgers white
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- Jan 17, 2016
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- English Teacher
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- Chinese
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Hi there. Would you please proofread the following text? Any help would be appreciated.
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Even after all the representatives had looked through the scope, people kept coming to have a look for themselves, which did not bother Gan, he only needed about 30 minutes for his personal observations. When finished, Gan would set the telescope to look at various things, mostly the Moon, which could be seen in great detail, though Mars, Jupiter, and Saturn, also attracted some interest.
All the fuss Lanhua attracted eventually took its toll, and she began avoiding people as much as possible, even many of her friends, especially the ones that used her to gain attention for themselves. She learned which friends were her real friends when they came to visit her. Some wanted her to go to the market or other places with them; so that they could be seen with her. A few, just wanted to see her, ask how she was, and didn’t mind if they went anywhere or not. The latter, she decided, were the best friends of all.
The Elders organised the moving of everyone’s belongings; the cave was large enough to hold everything which seemed to raise everyone’s spirits even more than that of mere survival.
By the time everybody had moved all their stuff, Gan had the first glimpse of what turned out to be five Asteroids headed their way. The sighting was vague, a small pinprick of light in the black background of the night sky.
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Even after all the representatives had looked through the scope, people kept coming to have a look for themselves, which did not bother Gan, he only needed about 30 minutes for his personal observations. When finished, Gan would set the telescope to look at various things, mostly the Moon, which could be seen in great detail, though Mars, Jupiter, and Saturn, also attracted some interest.
All the fuss Lanhua attracted eventually took its toll, and she began avoiding people as much as possible, even many of her friends, especially the ones that used her to gain attention for themselves. She learned which friends were her real friends when they came to visit her. Some wanted her to go to the market or other places with them; so that they could be seen with her. A few, just wanted to see her, ask how she was, and didn’t mind if they went anywhere or not. The latter, she decided, were the best friends of all.
The Elders organised the moving of everyone’s belongings; the cave was large enough to hold everything which seemed to raise everyone’s spirits even more than that of mere survival.
By the time everybody had moved all their stuff, Gan had the first glimpse of what turned out to be five Asteroids headed their way. The sighting was vague, a small pinprick of light in the black background of the night sky.
