[Grammar] Kelly, I must inform you that your students of Somerset High

[Nikitus]

Hello.

Are the following sentences grammatically correct?


"Kelly, I must inform you that your students of Somerset High are traveling to this theater by bus. Kevin, I have the wooden amulet that your grandmother gave to you before dying. So the two of you must give me one last shot. Now I will leave you alone, so you can get inspired. If you don't act one last scene for me the last shot, I will have to take drastic measures."

Thanks.

 

[Raymott]

If the sentences are all unrelated - which they certainly appear to be - they should not be in a paragraph. Start each sentence on a new line.
The last sentence isn't right.
"If you don't act one last scene for me - the last shot - I will have to take drastic measures."

 

[teechar]

"Kelly, I must inform you that your students [STRIKE]of[/STRIKE] from Somerset High are traveling to this theater by bus. Kevin, I have the wooden amulet that your grandmother gave to you before she died. [STRIKE]dying.[/STRIKE]

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[Tarheel]

I don't think you need to say that she did it before she died.

 

[emsr2d2]

If she gave it to him just​ before she died, it might be worth mentioning.