alpacinou
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- Joined
- Sep 30, 2019
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- Native Language
- Persian
- Home Country
- Iran
- Current Location
- Iran
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Jim collapsed onto the bed. The hotel bed sheets smelled of cheap detergent. It had been a long flight. As he tried to fall sleep, the hum of the jet's engine rang in his ears. He was hovering close to sleep when faint sounds of a couple having sex in the next room woke him up.
The next morning, he got dressed and headed to the hotel's restaurant for breakfast. The door of the next room where the couple resided was wide open. Jim stopped in the corridor, staring into the room. The cloudy day seeped through the curtains, casting a grayish pall over the room. Two bodies were under the blanket, their entwining legs jutting out. He saw movement and then a woman emerged from under the blanket, her wavy hair disheveled. She titled her head and stared at Jim with vacant, green eyes.
Jim collapsed onto the bed. The hotel bed sheets smelled of cheap detergent. It had been a long flight. As he tried to fall sleep, the hum of the jet's engine rang in his ears. He was hovering close to sleep when faint sounds of a couple having sex in the next room woke him up.
The next morning, he got dressed and headed to the hotel's restaurant for breakfast. The door of the next room where the couple resided was wide open. Jim stopped in the corridor, staring into the room. The cloudy day seeped through the curtains, casting a grayish pall over the room. Two bodies were under the blanket, their entwining legs jutting out. He saw movement and then a woman emerged from under the blanket, her wavy hair disheveled. She titled her head and stared at Jim with vacant, green eyes.
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